Thomas Coston

An Aged Vessel

By T.L. Coston

Ah, who is this stranger staring back at me
An imposter mocking youth and vitality
Eyes once bright and fair
Are now creviced within folds of an aged man

A lifetime seen through the prism of self
Weighted in experience; Leaden with guilt
I see the boy trapped behind hazel guile
He, who was once fair, I barely recognize

I see him standing askance in a stare
And beside him others who I am unaware
They are multitudes spanning time and space
Imprisoned in a vessel not long for this race

The hour glass has passed the pessimist test
Soon, there will be time for plenty of rest
For, this old man is about to give up the ghost
And join those in another human host

Topic(s) of this poem: age, death, elderly, regret

Poem Submitted: Sunday, September 8, 2019
Poem Edited: Saturday, October 5, 2019

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  • Shaun CronickShaun Cronick (5/27/2020 1:48:00 PM)

    Great poem Thomas and the hour glass and its sands of time none can ever escape.
    Simply make the most of life and enjoy as best we can every new day.
    ! 0++ and added to my favs.
    And thank you for writing and sharing your thoughtful and most poignant poem

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  • Dennis SpilchukDennis Spilchuk (3/18/2020 4:52:00 PM)

    The poem enforces the concept life is short; the sadness being it usually is in old age we realize how short it really is. The key to overcoming pessimism is to accept fate without regret & find peace in an acceptable future. Your poem is food for thought. Nicely written.

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  • Bri EdwardsBri Edwards (2/26/2020 9:57:00 PM)

    4 –

    st.4
    pessimist test?

    " another human host" human souls (bodies?) in Heaven ... OR H-E-L-L?

    too much symbolism for me? & many may not understand what i'll call idioms.

    Bri

    ;)

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  • Bri EdwardsBri Edwards (2/26/2020 9:55:00 PM)

    3 -

    st.3

    " others who I am unaware" Use " others of whom I'm unaware" ?

    the " aged man" is " seeing" (remembering) his life, right? "


    vessel not long for this race" a person whose life will end 'soon'?

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  • Bri EdwardsBri Edwards (2/26/2020 9:40:00 PM)

    2 -

    " I see the boy trapped behind hazel guile **
    He, who was once fair ****, I barely recognize"

    ** hazel, refering to eye color? ?

    &

    ** " guile" : Treacherous cunning; skillful deceit.
    OR
    A trick or stratagem.

    **** “fair”, meaning “honest”, OR “of light skin and hair color”?

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  • Bri EdwardsBri Edwards (2/26/2020 9:01:00 PM)

    1 -

    after a little research, i believe " creviced" is NOT a verb, but always an adj., so i'd put a comma after " creviced" . :)

    st.2

    " Weighted ** in experience; Leaden**** with guilt" [ i'd like " Weighted with" ]

    ** an adjective, here meaning " full" or " heavy" i think.

    **** an adjective, here meaning " sluggish" i think.

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  • Thomas CostonThomas Coston (9/8/2019 8:39:00 PM)

    Poet Poet, you made me laugh. I read your poem and left a comment. I appreciate your persistence.

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  • Me Poet Yeps PoetMe Poet Yeps Poet (9/8/2019 7:28:00 PM)

    The hour glass has passed the pessimist test
    Soon, there will be time for plenty of rest
    For, this old man is about to give up the ghost
    And join those in another human host

    GHOSTS APLENTY IN HEAVEN FRIEND NOW READ MY POEM
    MOMS SMILES

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    Thomas CostonThomas Coston(9/8/2019 8:40:00 PM)

    Poet Poet, you actually made me laugh. I read your poem and left a comment. I appreciate your persistence.

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  • Chinedu DikeChinedu Dike (9/8/2019 5:56:00 PM)

    The realities of old age are aptly captured in the poem. Beautiful and insightful rendition of words with conviction. Thanks for sharing, Thomas.

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  • Gajanan MishraGajanan Mishra (9/8/2019 3:37:00 PM)

    Plenty of test, great write

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