Complaint. Poem by Honny Zubedi

Complaint.

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Everything is very fresh and green;
But by your eyes they can't be seen.
Oh! why aren't you here with me darling;
The grass, trees and flowers too are complaining.
The cool spring at the mountain's base;
Into the brook, its water flows with such grace.
Darling if only you'd listen to my heart;
Living the life, won't be so hard.


Dated: 02/19/1979.

Wednesday, April 16, 2014
Topic(s) of this poem: love hurts
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Bri Edwards 24 April 2014

i don't have a complaint, BUT poemhunter says not to use all capital letters in a title, i believe. i shall now add some comments and corrections (as i see them) within the poem. - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - COMPLAINT. Everything is very fresh and green; But by your eyes they can't be seen. Oh! why are n't you here with me darling; .............[aren't, not are n't] The grass, trees and flowers too are complaining. The cool spring at the mountain's base; Into the brook, it's water flows with such grace............[its, not it's; it's means something else] Darling if only you'd listen to my heart; Living the life, wont be so hard...........[won't, not wont// WONT IS A different word, as i have copied, below] - - - - - - - - - - - - - - wont wônt, wont/ adjective literary adjective: wont 1. (of a person) in the habit of doing something; accustomed. he was wont to arise at 5: 30 every morning synonyms: accustomed, used, given, inclined More he was wont to arise at 5: 30 noun formalhumorous noun: wont 1. one's customary behavior in a particular situation. Constance, as was her wont, had paid her little attention synonyms: custom, habit, way, practice, convention, rule More Paul drove fast, as was his wont verb archaic verb: wont; 3rd person present: wonts; 3rd person present: wont; past tense: wont; past participle: wont; past tense: wonted; past participle: wonted; gerund or present participle: wonting 1. make or be or become accustomed. wont thy heart to thoughts hereof Origin Old English gewunod, past participle of wunian, ‘dwell, be accustomed’ of Germanic origin. ==================== pretty much everything else about the poem I LIKE. in fact, i'll send it to MyPoemList. i enjoy the speakers words and the rhymes. thanks for posting these poems of a departed poet. bri :)

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Honny Zubedi

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Karachi, Pakistan.
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